Alchohol & tobacco
Some good important laws in some countries don't allow alcohol and tobacco commercials . First , alcohol and tobacco are unhealthy for your body . Also , these laws try to reduce the number of addicts . Finally , these commercials encourage people , especially teenagers to use alcohol and tobacco . To conclude , these laws are so important and beneficial for society because alcohol and tobacco are harmful and dangerous .
Thanks, Mariam for posting your 3rd draft.
ReplyDeleteThe following is a list with mistakes noticed in your paragrpah and their corrected versions:
- lows = laws.
- alchohol = alcohol.
- commercails = commercials.
- unhealthy for you = unhealthy for the body.
- try to stop addicts from addition = try to reduce the number of addicts, based on the saying:"if you don't see it, you will not remember it."
- Finaly = Finally.
- especally = especially.
- In conclud = To conclude.
- remarkable for society = beneficial for the society.
Hope this is helpful, Batool :)
thank you miss , i will correct my mistakes soon
ReplyDeleteThanks, Batool. Good job :)
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